So much better than stick slashers
Like a stick slasher movie, only 10,000xbetter! Thanks for the chills, the thrills and the belly laughs! ;-)
So much better than stick slashers
Like a stick slasher movie, only 10,000xbetter! Thanks for the chills, the thrills and the belly laughs! ;-)
Not ready for prime time just yet
The concept is good - there are a gajillion different possible story lines with this idea. But as is, it didn't seem funny enough for an entire series. For one, I'm not sure about the way you're using "uncomfortable pauses". If the chip-eating scene was an example, it was way too stretched-out. For the way the character was drawn, you should probably focus a bit more on lip-syncing. As for the character itself, it may work - I'd think something a little closer in vocal mannerisms to Cliff from Cheers would be better, but I can see this one working. Just keep working at it, the concept is definitely a keeper in my opinion. Good luck!
Very good, dialog a bit over-parsed
This is very good, I only noticed a tiny issue with the dialog and even that isn't anything to really fret about. It comes across as a bit over-staged, it doesn't flow quite like natural dialog would. It "rambles" a bit. They need to space it out more, take a breath now and again and pauze, as well as varying the pitch of their voices a bit more. Of course, you got far more right than wrong - it's a very good thing when you've gotten good enough that the only problems are trivial things like that. What I mean is that even with that one tiny issue, this is still a lot better than many other shorts I consider "good". Keep it up! :-)
The voices were a real struggle - I made the whole thing with poorly thought out placeholders, and came back in the last few days and redid the whole lot properly. The problem was the New Zealand accent means we talk a hell of a lot faster than you do/can if doing easily understood or different voices, so I had to really cram them in to fit into the gaps I had! Lesson learnt however - in my next one, my placeholders will be slow talkers heh. Thanks for softening your review there, and pointing it out!
Nice!
I like that last one - "It was too short, the plot sucked and it needs voices, but -I liked it!-" LOL! :-) Seriously, I thought it was great as is. Waiting for more! :-)
I'm going to rack my brains so damn hard to create a good plot for the next episode.
I like, I like!
Cute sound effects! <splut> <splat> <split> <squish> <squash> ...
anywho, for an end... Nah, no ideas. The whole thing's wide open. Good job, though, whatever you do or don't do! :-)
Wow, and you're still in business?
I can't believe the ¢hur¢h of $¢ientology hasn't sued your ass off by now. Way to go! ;-)
Great "gadget" idea, too! :-)
This was awesome! It would make an interesting gadget item, too. You know, like those ones where you "design your own dance"? Have it where people can arrange a set of beats beforehand and then the little animated "you" dudes acting it out. This would look real cool as something like that. Just a thought, though... Later! :-)
I wish they made more like these. :-)
That was terrific! It's kind of a classic idea, but yet it's different enough to not be like others of its kind. My favorite part was the part where he started pulling copies of himself out of the library. A masterful stroke! :-)
Agree with the last reviewer
I agree with the last guy on most of it, only I think it -can- be done with stick figures. Regular characters are better, of course, but even if you want to use sticks for whatever reason, the other stuff he mentioned would help a lot.
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